It is true that the improvement of medical care will be related to the decrease of mortality where the human can take the opportunity to live longer. There are some arguments among people whether improved medical care will take more beneficial or it would be some drawbacks. I believe that improving this sector leads to a positive way.
Fundamentally, medical care is the most way that people can save human species by the invention of technology and bio-engineering to support as medication. It means that the human population would be higher than before. However, the next problem will come where these populations need space for their home living. In developed countries, medical care is good so that the country has a dense population. For instance, In Japan, life expectancy is high enough caused by an improvement in medical sectors but Japan is not a big country. Then, If space cannot full-fill those inhabitants, the cost of home living will increase dramatically.
On the other hand, improved medical care is not only disadvantageous but also some beneficial effects. Firstly, the more older people who have a long life, the more chance of those countries to have experienced people and teachers to transfer their knowledge. For example, more than 50% of Japanese are people in the range age group more than 60-year-old. but this country is remaining productive because those people prepare the younger generation to be professionals in some sectors such as technology, farming, IT and others. Secondly, the growth of the economy is related to how many productive people can work for their country. If improvement in the medical sector can support the older generation, the country will take benefit because the year of retirement and pension can be extended where the number of productive people will grow.
In conclusion, medical care brings to the beneficial affection to those countries which can manage the asset of people even if the side effect will produce the growth of the population significantly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...o some beneficial effects. Firstly, the more older people who have a long life, the more c...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... range age group more than 60-year-old. but this country is remaining productive be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14848484848 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86613006702 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512121212121 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1341928608 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.1875 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233680604796 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820091943753 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502161301533 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15052913974 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459742772447 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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