Over the past few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problems has this caused. What solutions can be taken to address this problems.
The media has long been known to exert a profound impact on the general public, which can lead to radical changes in the society as well as plethora of problems. For the past few years, young thin women has been promoted and idolized as a perfect image every girls must have irrespective of their age or profession. My following essay will discuss the negative consequences of this issue and also suggest some possible solutions to address this before it is too late.
To commence with, the results associated with portraying young lean women cause both mental and physical problems for other women. It is highly likely that those who do not have a slender body will forget their own beauty and gradually lose self esteem. These women are apparently under too much pressure and suffer from a lot of poor judgment from the society, which drive them to become obsessed with the idea of being a thin woman and hate their own body. This can result in an increasingly alarming rate in the number of suicide of women who come in for a lot of criticism and go into depression for a long time. Furthermore, it can easily be conceived that with the aim of achieving or maintaining an ideal image, they can fall prey to risky diets and harmful medical treatment without any sound advice from the doctor. This will lead to poor health conditions having negative effect on their career and through their life.
Therefore, proactive measures must be done to tackle this problem so as to create a civilized and equal society to live in. Initially, it is pivotal that strict regulations from the government be imposed to bar the media from projecting the image of thin women and instill the biases into the public. Besides, drugs and any illegal chemicals sold to women to lose weight must be prohibited especially in some spas. The modeling industry also should be banned from choosing too thin models as well as require participants in catwalk shows to have a health check up regularly. Last but not least, it is critical to change people’s conception of the beauty of women. Campaigns run by powerful, successful women regardless of their physical appearance will make a great contribution to empower young ones to focus on their professional career and learn how to appreciate themselves in preference to idolize the perfect image of a female. Meanwhile, encouraging the media to produce and broadcast realistic shows in order to bring the limelight the healthy old women as much as they are young thin, which will definitely change the public’s perspectives, attitudes and respect women equally.
To recapitulate, this mindset has been inherent in the society for a long time ago, which leads to adverse consequences and must be mitigated as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 469.0 315.596192385 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91471215352 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67024690595 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554371002132 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1862017034 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.588235294 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5882352941 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286186177504 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850592552489 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409376938909 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171438540956 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548233988576 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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