People should choose their course of study not on the basis of their own interests, but based on the kinds of jobs they can get.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It has been a common belief that study majors should not be decided by people's needs and desires but by potential jobs' requirements. From my perspective, I firmly support the second argument for some reasons detailed below.
First and foremost, people have always been indoctrinated and malnipulated by the idea of chasing a dream, so they gradually become less practical, resulting in a large number of people who are not well-equipped for jobs after graduation. Wasting time and efforts on improving impractical skills can lead to numerous unqualified workers. Moreover, a dreamy job might not financially productive. As a result, some people will find applying for a fixed job significantly challenging since they have prioritized their own personal interests over specific qualifications that are far different from their own.
On the other hand, it can be extremely difficult to realize a dream, except for the ones who are consistently willing to pay a price for it. It means that they will lose their competence to do ordinary work if they choose to entirely sacrifice for their own interests and skills. In addition, since the success rate is pretty low, it would become a truly gamble for those who bet their whole career on their interests. They would achieve many accomplishments in what field they chose, or they would lose everything.
All things considered, although following personal interests sounds glamorous, I strongly consider it too risky for my future. Above all, no matter if the choice is about personal need or future career requirements, it should be carefully and properly weighed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...lly become less practical, resulting in a large number of people who are not well-equipped for jo...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('truly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('gamble') instead of another adjective.
...ess rate is pretty low, it would become a truly gamble for those who bet their whole career on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, except for, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20384615385 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95771731509 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8495181678 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278705764269 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917322248147 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692080309549 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146166195609 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676338373248 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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