The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20 in the last ten years Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend

Recently approximately 20% growth is reported in the number of children who suffer from obesity in western society over the previous decade. This essay will argue some rationales related to this underlying upward trend, and potential and detrimental impacts driven.
No doubt, we live in a world that thanks to ever-increasing technology developments, lives become much more convenient and regardless of physical demand. The first and foremost reason regarding children's overweighting is fast food and junk food popularity, which contains a substantial amount of additive and lake of nutrition nutrients but delicious, persuasive, and appealing. Furthermore, playing video games, which alter a primary recreational activity for children these days and typically dedicate most of their time to play without any physical activity and movement, can account for another main culprit behind children's obesity.
On the other hand, if children gain weight more and more, it will accompany severe long-term problems. First of all, their health and well-being link to their weight directly, and it is essential to have a moderate weight in proportion to their age and height. Otherwise, a number of dangerous diseases are waiting for them, such as diabetes. Besides, it is proven that the more children eat without exercising and physical activity, the more they will suffer from muscle weaknesses and bone-related illnesses in the future, and this sedentary-inactive lifestyle will cause a heavy burden and strain on health care systems.
To sum up, the population of children who suffer from overweight and obesity is increasing at an alarming rate, particularly in western society. Several reasons are responsible for this destructive trend, such as an insatiable appetite for unhealthy foods and computer games on the top. Undoubtedly, this trend will accompany non-compensatable and hazardous results for their families and themselves and society as a whole.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, well, no doubt, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57718120805 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07716474054 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620805369128 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1797979447 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177888522893 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631241521943 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454737103524 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115968971724 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567742212157 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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