The personal information of many individuals is held by large companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Opinions are divided on whether the advantages of sharing the individual's personal data with big corporations outweigh the disadvantages. I believe that the risks of safety and creating artificial needs are too serious to justify possible benefits.
The advantages associated with exchanging personal information are better user experience and increases marketing. With regard to the former, companies save user's personal information through various means. The most important of which is the internet, which saves the data in the form of cookies whenever an individual surfs something there. Organizations analyze this data and provide users with amazing features like auto-populating the details while filling up an online form and the other is that an individual can order anything with a single click from the comfort of their own homes. As far as marketing is concerned, companies create products and improve services on the basis of the information shared by the consumers. The best examples of this can be seen in testimonials, where users provide their valuable feedback about any goods they purchased. Not only would this increases marketing, but it could help to create more robust products.
The above-mentioned advantages have been achieved at the cost of loss of privacy and creating artificial needs. The loss of privacy is a major worry. Although people imagine that they can access the internet anonymously, this is not the case. The truth is that everything that people do is recorded and stored indefinitely on corporate databases, which helps cybercriminals to hack the individual's information and perform online scams. On the other hand, based on user's interests companies promotes their latest products by means of various communication, such as by sending mails and by audio or video messages. By doing so, such organizations create unnecessary demand for the products, and consumers keep on squandering their hard-earned money on such things.
In conclusion, although there are many advantages of sharing personal information, the drawbacks related to loss of privacy and creating artificial needs can not be ignored. For this reason, I believe that the disadvantages are too severe to justify the advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, in conclusion, such as, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47687861272 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03893041471 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554913294798 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2538605369 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.470588235 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238319624988 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687479701104 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471497865891 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138126588039 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181376384408 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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