Personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
The advancement of technology and the Internet have been changed our life into new situation. People work, play, and communicate differently in comparison to their descendants. These changes lead to increasing the Internet usage and big companies started to monitor our online life and gather information for different purposes. This behavior has some advantages and disadvantages that I will discuss now and explain my opinion that which one outweighs the other.
We can feel the various benefits of gathering information in our everyday life. When we want to shop online, the website can sort the goods according to our previous shopping behaviors. It can show some materials that we may look for them. Another advantage is that we can use of other’s information indirectly. As an example, a routing application can illustrate traffic congestion by receiving signal from other drivers and show better route to avoid traffic jam.
On the other hand, some enumerate the disadvantages of gathering information. The most important disadvantage, I reckon, is mental problem. Some people may presume that they are monitored every second and they do not have any privacy. For example, when one opens a website and see an advertisement completely related to his or her needs, thus, he or she may feel uncomfortable. Another issue is abuse of gathered information for unpeaceful purposes. For example, Facebook, one of the biggest online social media, was sentenced for selling the gathered information from users to advertising companies which completely embarrassed its users.
In my point of view, any new technology have cons and pros. Experts and parliaments should try t lessen its disadvantages. I believe the advantages of gathering information by companies are more outweigh that its disadvantages and government could introduce some laws to limit these disadvantages.
To sum up, the Internet provides many benefits for us and some may abuse of it. However, the advantages of the Internet are more significant than disadvantages and government could limit them. I think, although we could not ignore some treats and disadvantages of gathering online information by the Internet companies, we face several benefits from that.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, second, so, thus, for example, i reckon, i think, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38285714286 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08667180911 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548571428571 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0922307568 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7142857143 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174104247398 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518029171898 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535164184224 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106322026088 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502748995293 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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