In poorer families school children may have to work part time as well as study Discuss the merits and demerits for these children

Certain individuals of needy people providing a temporary occupation for a child who study at academic subjects simultaneously and this is a widespread situation these days. From my point of view, this detrimental approach puts a strain on youths and prone them to be perverted for the rest of their life. This essay is consisted of both benefits and drawbacks of this subject.

First and for most, The most principle influence of being multitasking is providing a considerable amount of money while studying. indeed, being not affordable to accumulate or buy some ordinary goods is stems from money deprivation and deteriorates digestion system. In addition to this, being dedicated at the age of 18 or less concentrates physical body and bolster character to be pointed in the right directionFor tough conditions such as awareness or managing the family lonely.

On the other hand, The first issue of working while studying is lack of focusing enough on academic purposes. working overshadows brain to dominate in order to promote at some specific subjects and disrupt youngsters to be effective among classmates. furthermore, teenager’s hobby acts a pivotal role in their life and devoid of time is inevitable in this case. They would have gotten involved in an offensive reaction to some challenging problems and will be regretful of not having enough time to unwind and be vigorous to release energy in a pleasurable way.

Overall, it is conspicuous that government should set up practical ways in which children are observed and avoiding them from workforce. Improving infrastructure of family and increase their knowledge about children’s rights is essential. At the end, having a sustainable condition for reaching success wouldn’t be happening if widespread association among people was existed.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Indeed
...derable amount of money while studying. indeed, being not affordable to accumulate or ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun concentrates is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...is, being dedicated at the age of 18 or less concentrates physical body and bolster ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Working
...f focusing enough on academic purposes. working overshadows brain to dominate in order ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...sters to be effective among classmates. furthermore, teenager’s hobby acts a pivotal role i...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a pleasurable way" with adverb for "pleasurable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nwind and be vigorous to release energy in a pleasurable way. Overall, it is conspicuous that gov...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, while, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36363636364 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0739177949 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63986013986 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6082264701 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140765061429 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476899744856 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034127495682 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831261008073 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417689543045 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.