The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of
the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the
fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Women’s working is a problem of controversy. Some people think it causes some problems in the families and society while others claims the opposite. According to the several researches in the recent decades, it was revealed that father’s working has a smaller effect on the adolescent misbehavior than mother’s working. With that in mind, in the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons.
It is immediately apparent that mothers have stronger bond with children and absence of them in the home may cause some problem for children such as lack of self-control, impolitely, having bad diet and etc. Also, it should be noted that there is a correlation between time of mother works and amount of juvenile delinquency will be appeared in the teenager. For instance, my mother has a nocturnal work and I cannot see her during night when I want to speak with her about my days or when I saw a nightmare and there is no one to calm me down.
A study done by researcher concluded that type of mother work can have great impact on adolescent misbehavior. As the career was harder and more stressful for mother, there is more likely a tired mum who have no time for teenager. In many cases, it can be seen that teenager suspended school and showed misbehavior to strike mother’s attention who was overwhelmed after a while. For example, my friend’s mum thinks that having adequate money for living can help my friend to have better future and she needs no attention or time.
To sum it up, I think the mother’s role in bringing up children and reduction of juvenile delinquency can not be underestimated. As I mentioned before most part of the identity of every teenager is her mum and absence of her in the family have a very bad impact on the sensible adolescent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 200, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...lf-control, impolitely, having bad diet and etc. Also, it should be noted that there is ...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d's mum thinks that having adequate money for living can help my friend to h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82142857143 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93330275511 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551948051948 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7871397726 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.230769231 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0983038973912 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428170168713 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044912186226 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601924313796 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313209524369 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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