At present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, in many countries around the world, the number of young individuals accounted for a far larger proportion than which of the elderly. This may cause some problems , but I tend to think that it also brings a lot of benefits for the development of those nations.
On the one hand, when there are too many young adults in our countries, we must deal with their demand of job. It is inevitable that we can't supply enough works for them and many people will become unemployed. This may result in some serious situations such as robbery or deceit and make our society very complicated. Furthermore, education also has to improve its quality to meet the higher request. So, having young population has some negative aspects that can cause challenges for our life.
However, I would argue that there are more advantages than disadvantages in this situation. Firstly, young adults absolutely have the strong bodies and good health. Therefore, they can be the most effective workers in companies and bring higher productivity. Besides, young people are always creative and flexible than the older ones, so they can usefully contribute to develop the whole society. They invent new technologies to support human in several fields. They help our life become more modern and convenient. As a matter of fact, countries which have young population usually develop faster than others. For example, China is the nation whose a very high percentage of inhabitants belongs to young adults. That's the reason why in many recent years, it develops very fast and now becomes the second biggest economy in the world.
In conclusion, I think that young people benefit a lot for our life. If we can solve all the unexpected effects, I claim that with the contribution of those young people, our countries will become more and more modern by time.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9674267101 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60217702427 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596091205212 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3866350211 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7222222222 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17863480543 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509982594283 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435688220701 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109609263537 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00808457391074 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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