At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In present, many countries have to consider the phenomenon of elderly. Through the advance of medical technology, the life expectancy has elongated. But some developed countries, for example, Dubai is the country where the number of young adults is larger than the number of older people.
One characteristic of a country is decided by a certain population who charge relatively more. Thus, if some countries include a large number of young adults, then they can be a mark and symbol of this country. These young adults will arouse the potency of the country.
I’d say this phenomenon has many advantages. For example, young adults are more active and healthy than elderly. So they can have more chances to work. They can invigorate the strength of industry and quality of technology.
However, this advantage will make sense when some conditions are equipped. As one of example, the governments has to support the affluent working environment for young adults. They should be ready to accept new circumstances and knowledge. At the same time, the quality of welfare for older people is important as well.
Some people could say the wisdom of elderly is important. It’s true, but I’d say the harmonization of young and old ages is more important. They can learn and exchange knowledge and wisdom with each other. Based on these reason, I’d say this phenomenon will outweigh the disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...y more. Thus, if some countries include a large number of young adults, then they can be a mark a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15217391304 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74712773184 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552173913043 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.5280893328 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.8333333333 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.7777777778 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313943469014 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802394065704 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770997856902 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162938973747 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816495881212 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 50.2224549098 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.7 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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