At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
During the recent decades, in many nations, the population is obviously separated into two distinct groups of young adults and older people. Personally, this trend brings more advantages to the economy development in some countries than its drawbacks. In this essay, i will clarify my points of view.
Firstly, in many developed countries, the population of senior citizens has raised rapidly in recent years, leading to the lack of active workforces and the expensive cost of hiring foreign workers. In detail, the young contribute to the construction of economic operations and rich labor resources as a primary factor. Furthermore, the government should possess many aid policies for the old to help them in their remaining lives such as retire salary, welfare and so on, that leads to the expense of great part of government's budget. As the result, based on the foundation of the healthy problems and age, the old may be professors and have rich experiences in their fields but they can not work as main characters to the improvement of nation.
Secondly, with a education method of extreme training systems , it is strongly believed that the young can possess a chance of participating to the major human resource under guidance of experiential managers. To explain, although the rate of committing crimes and causing social issues of young adults may be more serious than those of the old, the government can also create a firmly controlling system to prevent those circumstances.
To conclude, both of teams have theirs own advantages and disadvantages to the public community but at different levels. However, the combination of them in working can profoundly bring more and more benefits
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88095200898 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.1221284726 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118680444294 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447446400406 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436741328717 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756217063471 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588081956348 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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