Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too clostly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures.To what extent do you agree?

It is true that doing research and treating ailments are expensive so according to some investing money for preventive measures is worthwhile. In my opinion I consider that it is better to spend money for preventive measures rather than treating disease and doing research.

One reason I support preventive measures is that these days the major factor behind many disease is lack of exercise and overeating of junk foods.It directly affects the health and reduce immunity, for example , studies already proved that overeating junk food in young age results in obesity .Lack of exercises is a is a predisposing factor for heart disease's.Therefore people start to do exercises and to start to eat homemade food helps to avoid this circumstances and able to avoid heart problems and related diseases.

Another reason I support preventive measures is that overuse of alcohol , cigarette will end up in major ailments like lung cancer ,oral cancer and cirrhosis of liver.Treatment for this disease need lakhs and lakhs of money and this will disturb the balance of the whole family.Therefore , avoiding this heavy burden , people try to understand the ill-effects of alcohol and smoking and try to keep a distance away for a healthier and balanced life.Moreover , healthy people are the backbone of a society as it will bring harmony and more economic advantages to the society when it's citizens are healthy.

In conclusion,I consider people become aware about preventive measures so that they can be more cautious about their health lead a happy life.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.208 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94799210302 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 20.2975951904 246% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 209.860906317 49.4020404114 425% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 260.4 106.682146367 244% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.0 20.7667163134 241% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.8 7.06120827912 252% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180852323451 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140948246253 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103442450511 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126403753613 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115766336022 0.056905535591 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.1 13.0946893788 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.27 50.2224549098 24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.3001002004 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.83 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.1190380762 217% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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