Q1. Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the conversion of green spaces near the central area of the city into residential buildings has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities around the central business district by housing estates in order to reduce the time dedicated to commuting to and from work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that people should not remove green places close to the city centre so as to build apartment blocks do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks around the central area of the city makes it possible for employees to take a rest helping them to unwind during their lunchtime with greater ease. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for gardens and parks near the city centre, a multitude of working people would have difficulty alleviating stress, which can even exert a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute apartment complexes for environment-friendly amenities near the central business district. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a myriad of workers residing near the city centre travel to their workplaces by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from traffic congestion, enabling the masses to have an improved standard of living. This is because the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decrease. Moreover, depriving commuters of less time devoted to travelling to work allows them to concentrate more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the transformation of environmentally friendly places near the city centre into housing estates is necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25543478261 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93975022408 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573369565217 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7456130262 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.933333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5333333333 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283896824 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790383006977 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501896483713 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154850896037 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420329499076 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities around the centr...
^^^
Line 4, column 169, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e green places close to the city centre so as to build apartment blocks do so for severa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the tran...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25543478261 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93975022408 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573369565217 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7456130262 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.933333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5333333333 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283896824 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790383006977 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501896483713 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154850896037 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420329499076 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.