Q16 In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, the issue of the age gap between parents and children has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are some advantages to giving birth to babies at an early age, these are exceeded by the disadvantages, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that having children as early in life as possible exerts a positive influence on families do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that younger parents are more likely to participate in leisure activities with their children, such as football and online games, making it possible for them to build strong relationships with one another. In addition, young people raising their offspring are easily capable of empathising with their children as not only can they frequently communicate with their children, but they are generally also more open-minded than older parents who are more strict in general due to a larger generation gap.
My opinion, however, is that the drawbacks of taking responsibility for becoming parents at a young age are more significant. Perhaps the principal disadvantage is that a multitude of younger parents often have difficulty supporting their own living costs, preventing them from giving their children opportunities to receive better education that will be invaluable in their children's future careers. This is mainly because younger parents have not saved enough money since they have never worked for a long time. Another drawback is that the development of youngsters' behaviour can be negatively affected by young people looking after their offspring considering that younger parents who are generally less mature may be incapable of setting a good example to their children due to a lack of life experience, which can even lead children to become immature and selfish. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the drawbacks of a narrow age gap surpass the benefits for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...culty supporting their own living costs, preventing them from giving their childr...
^^
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the draw...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23592493298 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81251261317 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565683646113 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.3814196636 49.4020404114 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6428571429 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164515137831 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053728540595 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480086152528 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953607074496 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446609737727 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.