Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologist claims that the basic reason for this is that children these days not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.
Before giving my opinion about the fact about increases in violent crime under age of 18, I would like to mention teenager’s psychological change in both mental and physical state. This child to adolescent change made teenagers more fragile, sensitive and easier to get into bad habit. For this reason, I am agreeing with the fact that there is increase in crime among youngster. I have three statement to support my opinion based on my experience.
First, in modern world, any information can be found from internet, especially harmful information such as fatal ritual activity, self-injuring game and drugs and so on. For example, my closest experience is that my younger sister tried to cut her arms to make her familiar to her peers. This habit might lead teenagers like my sisters, to make crime to prove her cool appearance.
Secondly, 24/7 social life is one of the biggest bad influence to teenager’s behavior. In social life, they tend to do abnormal things to look different from others. For so, they share their wicked acts to social media continuously until it considered normal and cool. Also another support is that criminal movies that is showing cruel and voilent action. These things gives bad influence to teenagers especially who are in unstable mental change.
Lastly, when I was teenager, there was plenty of activities which made my teen life busy, but today, teens tends to prefer offline in internet world. This might made them more free but boring time. Imagine staying home all day scrolling social network, boring isnt it. To do something interesting, teenagers might involve something serious like involving in crime.
In conclustion, the fact that there is a increase in violent crime under age is true. The reason is not only social and emotional learning from parents but also external world is affecting more. This might include, too many harmful information, 24/7 social life and less physical activity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.084375 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6077390081 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61875 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6697569533 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6315789474 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8421052632 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230272382506 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699019500807 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690352668745 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126341911833 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799250147839 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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