The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments’ expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you disagree or agree.?
These days, the conservation of old buildings is considered to charge an exorbitant budget from government. Hence, many people consider that this expenditure should be allocated more in housing and road systems. Although i cannot deny that living accommodation and roads are worth-investing , the renovation of ancient constructions is also an pressing issue which must be addressed.
On the other hand, I understand the reasons why modern citizens prefer to allocate their budget on furnishing houses and developing roads. Firstly, inhabitants have more chance to live in accommodation with comfortable atmosphere and modern layout. For instance, it is HCM city that government begins to focus more on enhancing living facilities for citizens. Moreover, gratifying the demand of drivers in better road design is also an important matter. The more the population increases, the more the private vehicles are driven in the street. As a result, if government do not pay attention to expand road systems and make new ways to connect different surrounding cities, traffic jam may come as an expense and cause many setbacks.
However, I still believe that the restoration of many old builidings such as museums and exhibitions is worth-paying and should be priotised in many factors. To begin with, the existence of these constructions can strengthen nation’s sense of identity. Compared to modern constructions such as sky scrappers, ancient heritages display more unique architectural design of a certain period in the past. For instance, Independence Palace, which is one of the most popular features of ancient period, reappear the living accommodation of Presiden in the past. Hence, if the authority fails to protect those historical relics, it is a great loss for the preservation of national features. Secondly, such these historical heritages contribute to the boom of tourism. Every year, there are thousands of foreign visitors come and appreciate the beauty of national glamor.This case is often seen in Notre Dame Cathedral, which is the well-known public attration in Vietnam. As a result, such a huge increase in tourism can also attribute to the massive profit for the country’s economy.
Take everything into consideration, I agree that national budget can be allocated to improve modern facilities for residents. However, since historical heritages bring numerous merits for the nation, governments should also focus on preserving those places.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e in housing and road systems. Although i cannot deny that living accommodation a...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ommodation and roads are worth-investing , the renovation of ancient constructions...
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Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...vation of ancient constructions is also an pressing issue which must be addressed....
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ppreciate the beauty of national glamor.This case is often seen in Notre Dame Cathed...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts. However, since historical heritages bring numerous merits for the nation, go...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48947368421 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08771428607 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576315789474 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6692400944 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.789473684 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156914565141 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433148676576 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541865442427 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102088568137 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487896188249 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e in housing and road systems. Although i cannot deny that living accommodation a...
^
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ommodation and roads are worth-investing , the renovation of ancient constructions...
^^
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...vation of ancient constructions is also an pressing issue which must be addressed....
^^
Line 3, column 863, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ppreciate the beauty of national glamor.This case is often seen in Notre Dame Cathed...
^^^^
Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts. However, since historical heritages bring numerous merits for the nation, go...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48947368421 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08771428607 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576315789474 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6692400944 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.789473684 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156914565141 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433148676576 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541865442427 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102088568137 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487896188249 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.