Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Comments about the t

Essay topics:

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Comments about the task:
1. An opinion essay
2. You must say how much you agree or disagree
Totally agree
1. Corruption
2. Bad economic policies
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

For decades, rich nations have sent money to poorer countries. However, it was not a really worth thing undeveloped countries overcome their status. So, we need to think about besy ways of help them smartly rather than financial support. I totally agree with this idea and will suggest what method would be good in political and individual way.

As I mentioned that I perfetly understand the concept. Therefore, I belive that people who really want to donate to the poor, there are a lot of way you can support them. First of all, seriously considering about what they shoud have develop themselves because financial aid could make poverty for a second ,but the aid does not keep for ages. The helps only work urgently. Moreover, many news representer does not show deep inside of their real lives. No matter what the news say, you experience their real life.

Secondly, diverse education should be delivered to undeveloped contries. All have the right to study what people desire ,but they have less opportunity to learn something and even somewhere had better work instead of studying. there are some reasonable reasons why they have to work even though they are underage ,most of their parents suffer from severe diseases and hard to make a living BBC says in 2015. Children have made money I do not think whether it is enough or not instead of their parents. In this passage, we need to think two of the ways that can help. Compulsory education need for them but before someone estabilshes schools after that everything will be fine.

In conclusion, I think governmental and individuals position are very important to them and we go through what should be.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ood in political and individual way. As I mentioned that I perfetly understand ...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'developed'.
Suggestion: developed
... considering about what they shoud have develop themselves because financial aid could ...
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Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cial aid could make poverty for a second ,but the aid does not keep for ages. The ...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...The helps only work urgently. Moreover, many news representer does not show deep ins...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...The helps only work urgently. Moreover, many news representer does not show deep inside o...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ve the right to study what people desire ,but they have less opportunity to learn ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...re had better work instead of studying. there are some reasonable reasons why they ha...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ve to work even though they are underage ,most of their parents suffer from severe...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... parents suffer from severe diseases and hard to make a living BBC says in 2015. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, even so, i think, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88028169014 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49545311571 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633802816901 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8167480382 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5294117647 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17059778933 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493653497472 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392330942906 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102718254175 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648186199827 0.056905535591 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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