Scientists agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that this problems can be solved by educating people to eat less junk food. Other people believe that education will not work. Discuss both

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Scientists agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that this problems can be solved by educating people to eat less junk food. Other people believe that education will not work.

Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Experts through the developing and developed world have debated whether education can advocate the importance of balance diet efficiently or not. This essay will discuss both views and assert that learning is the first step, as well as a vital stage, to foster the well-being of our younger generation.

To begin with, schooling is a key to establish a healthy lifestyle. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly junior learners can understand the need of our bodies. In fact, compared to those who are not educated, enlightened students often recognise the nutritional content of their meals, giving rose to the likelihood of consuming balance diets in daily life. Secondly, by identifying the drawbacks of growing up on a diet of junk food, students are likely to stay away from fast food shop such as McDonald and MOSBurger, because of the potential ailments of obesity, diabetes and heart diseases.

Although there is a case for education promulgating the idea of healthy diet, its effectiveness cannot be overstated. This is mainly attributed to the fundamental nature of our education system. For instance, instead of adopting those recommended lifestyles in textbook, the majority of our descendants admitted that they memorise the content merely because of academic needs, and this may stand in the way of employing of these knowledges in real life. Furthermore, students in their formative years are mostly rebellious and are eager to encounter challenges. This tends to encourage themselves to eat in the opposite way under peer pressures.

In conclusion, there are good arguments for both sides. Given the increasing awareness of health problem, parents can act as a role model on eating in a flourishing way and constantly share the ensuing benefits with their children. It is predicted that education, accompanied by parenting skills, will manage to reduce the children's desires on consuming junk food.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30944625407 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90211013003 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635179153094 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0685407833 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.428571429 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18407261351 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541866583163 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334448644322 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103381413454 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025317257405 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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