Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?
IN THIS CONTEMPORARY ERA, SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MORE VALUED THAN MUSIC AND ART. IN MY OPINION, EQUAL IMPORTANCE MUST BE GIVEN TO SPECIALISTS OF BOTH DOMAIN.
ADVANCEMENT IN AUTOMATION HAS PRODUCED COMFORT IN HUMAN LIFE. HOWEVER, INNOVATIVE IDEAS AND NEW EXPERIMENTS ARE STILL NEEDED IN THIS FIELD. THEREFORE, THIS SPECIALITY MUST BE HIGHLY VALUED. AS AN ILLUSTRATION, OWING TO SCARCITY OF, IT EXPERTS IN PAKISTAN, FEW NATIONAL EXPERTS WERE OFFERED HIGH INCOME TO REVOLUTIONIZE IT SECTOR. IN ADDITION, SCIENTISTS DESRVE RESPECT AND HIGH STATUS IN SOCIETY, AS THEY DEVOTE MAJOR PROPORTION OF THEIR LIFE TO THE BETTERMENT OF MANKIND. FOR INSTANCE, SCIENTISTS SPEND MANY MONTHS IN SPACE, LIVING APART FROM THEIR FAMILY TO EXPLORE AND TO ACQUIRE KNOWLEDGE SPACE TO GLORIFY AND TO CREATE EASE IN HUMAN POPULATION. THEREFORE, IT IS VITAL TO CONSIDER PEOPLE FROM SUCH AREAS, IMPORTANT.
ALTHOUGH MODERN SOCIETY WELCOME AND VALUE SPECIALISTS FROM SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY, THE HARDWORK OF MUSICIANS AND ARTISTS CAN NOT BE DENIED. AS THEY COMFORT HUMAN SOUL BY PRODUCING POSITIVE IMPACT ON SPIRITUAL LEVEL. TO ILLUSTRATE, STATISTICS REVELEAD, DUE TO THE PLEASING SOUND OF VARIOUS INSTRUMENTS, A MAJOR IMPROVEMENT WAS NOT IN PSYCHIATRIC PATIENTS. FURTHERMORE,ART CREATES AWARNESS AMONG MASSES AS IT IS THE EFFECTIVE WAY TO CONVEY YOUR MESSAGE THROUGH CREATIVITY. IN OTHER WORDS, SHARMEEN, A NOBLE PRIZE WINNER, FROM PAKISTAN, PORTRAYED THE POSITIVE IMAGE OF WOMEN AND HIGHLIGHTED THE DOMISTIC VIOLENCE ISSUE. HENCE, THE ROLE OF THE EXPERTS FROM MUSIC AND ART IS UNDENIEABLE.
TO CONCLUDE, OWING TO MODERNIZATION, SCIENE AND TECHNOLOGY IS CONSIDERED VITAL IN THISS ERA.IN MY VIEW, THE ROLE OF EXPERTS FROM SCIENCE ,TECHNOLOGY MUSIC AND ARTS MUST BE CONSIDERED EQUAL IN SOCIETY.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...USICIANS AND ARTISTS CAN NOT BE DENIED. AS THEY COMFORT HUMAN SOUL BY PRODUCING PO...
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...NOT IN PSYCHIATRIC PATIENTS. FURTHERMORE,ART CREATES AWARNESS AMONG MASSES AS IT IS ...
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Suggestion: ,
...Y VIEW, THE ROLE OF EXPERTS FROM SCIENCE ,TECHNOLOGY MUSIC AND ARTS MUST BE CONSID...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, apart from, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42753623188 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99163048722 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626811594203 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1331437244 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.625 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160883776872 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458794551136 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060265081229 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103924484059 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345681890076 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.77 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.