Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympic wastes money, which could be used for important issues.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
The olympic games are the biggest display of our inclination towards sports. It not only brings sportsmen from different parts of the world together to compete, but also serves as a platform to strengthen international relationship between countries. While some believe that these games are an excellent opportunity for people from different countries to interact, there are others who consider that the olympic games, being very expensive are waste of financial resources and this money shall be used for many other vital issues. In this essay, I would like to discuss about merits and demerits about these two contrasting opinions and would like to clarify my stand regarding this.
To begin with, right from the beginning of olympic games, more than a century ago, in Athens, the olympic games gained popularity among individuals. As the human civilization progressed, so as these games have also imbibed the current technological advancements. I have witnessed a few olympic events myself and I can say that indeed, there could be no better display of sportsmanship on earth than these games. Besides being an absolute pleasure to watch, these events also provide an international platform for many less popular games like water polo, synchronized swimming, curling and many more. To host an olympic event, the venue has to be up to the standards set by the international olympic committee, and in doing so, the whole city experiences a faster and targetted growth in terms of infrastructure and employment. Also during the long olympic events, there is a considerable financial opportunities for the host city and country.
On the other hand, arranging state of the art infrastructure, hosting hundreds of nations and their thousands of athletes, setting up numerous game venues and many more unseen issues, cost a huge amount of money. Due to the same reason, it is not possible for many developing or under developed countries to even think about hosting such a colossal event. There are people who believe that in place of hosting an olympic event by redirecting the major chunk of financial resources towards it, the governments shall focus on developing basic needs like education, health and defence.
To conclude, I would like to say that although these ace sporting events are very expensive to conduct and this money could be useful in developing other vital ameneties, Olympics indeed helps in development of these infrastructures in a longer runand it creates a lot of local employment opportunities. Besides all this, these events are a feast for eyes, a delight to watch and inspiring for a sportsman to be a part of it. Hence it must be conducted in it's full glory and excitement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, regarding, so, then, while, as to, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 442.0 315.596192385 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12895927602 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90202712426 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549773755656 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9052053616 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.6875 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.625 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276990888216 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887304062274 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702418966532 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171169008895 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766608662595 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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