In some countries, parents expect children to spend a long time studying in and after school have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in.
Adults in some nations are looking forward to increasing their kids' learning time, which means diminish the spare time. In my opinion, this view would affect the kids' development and their community badly.
Firstly, If adolescents spend most of their time studying indoors, they will have less creativity, which is extremely important for their future work. When the kids stay at home, dwell on books, they cannot know how to talk with strangers and how to solve unpredictable situations. However, in order to live in the real world, they need practical knowledge rather than the difficult theory which is rarely used. For instance, the majority of Vietnamese primary students who suffer from hectic schedules are being less and less creative than ever.
Secondly, learning too much could lead to difficulties in communication, which directly do harm to the relationship around the kids. While the kid concentrates too much on lessons without having a friend to talk with, sooner or later they will tend to be afraid of social activity, like participating in a city meeting or feeling lost in the crowd. Moreover, the youngsters could even suffer from stress and other mental illnesses. Take Chinese students for example. Yearly, over the world, China has the highest suicide rate from the age of 12 to 18, mostly be student, what are the consequences of forcing kids learning too much.
In conclusion, I would argue that children should not be expected to learn too much after school in order to have more spare time to relax.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kids'' or 'kid's'?
Suggestion: kids'; kid's
... my opinion, this view would affect the kids development and their community badly. ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... work. When the kids stay at home, dwell on books, they cannot know how to talk w...
^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le situations. However, in order to live in the real world, they need practical k...
^^
Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[2]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'activities'.
Suggestion: activities
...r they will tend to be afraid of social activity, like participating in a city meeting o...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1285.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05905511811 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60601670805 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661417322835 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1858869694 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.083333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175144233096 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574526751296 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696293380561 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118445570007 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688281383439 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kids'' or 'kid's'?
Suggestion: kids'; kid's
... my opinion, this view would affect the kids development and their community badly. ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... work. When the kids stay at home, dwell on books, they cannot know how to talk w...
^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le situations. However, in order to live in the real world, they need practical k...
^^
Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[2]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'activities'.
Suggestion: activities
...r they will tend to be afraid of social activity, like participating in a city meeting o...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1285.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05905511811 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60601670805 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661417322835 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1858869694 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.083333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175144233096 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574526751296 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696293380561 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118445570007 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688281383439 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.