In some countries teenagers are allowed to work part time jobs. Some people say it is a good thing, but others disagree. Discuss both views. Give your own opinion and support it with examples.

Indeed, the modern tendencies show a clear picture, that teenagers began to work regardless of schooling process. Of cource, it hase some positive and negatve apects among the young generation and in this essay I will try to show extended view to this statement.
Nowadasy, a huge number of distinquish jobs are offered to teenagers. In spite of university schedule, the students apply to the vacancies in hope to get a job. Without any doubt, being employment could contributes valuable moments, firstly, the teenager will have own money and hence could eneble to pay for own education without disturbing the parents. Secondly, it has positive infuence throughout the young people in notion what is economy itself, they will obtain a lesson in personal finance, doubtless, the working is one of the best classroom where you could gain experience in budgeting and crediting. Thirdly, the teenager get a huge professional skills in practice rather than in college and hereby it would have an advantage impact in future.
However, the disadvantages such earlier jobs are distractions from their studies. For instance, according to statistic, the teenager who works loose their motivation to studyand would like to spend more time in workplace. The consequencies which may cause by wishing to work could have a negatie impact on society at all. The young people could loose the sense of education and morover will forget the value of education diplom.
To sum up, I beleive that only a balance approach could really be helpful in this issue and obviously, governments may involve the students in part time jobs in summer period when it does not distract thier studies.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'contribute'
Suggestion: contribute
...thout any doubt, being employment could contributes valuable moments, firstly, the teenager...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...y, the teenager get a huge professional skills in practice rather than in college and ...
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Line 2, column 744, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ereby it would have an advantage impact in future. However, the disadvantages such earli...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ng to statistic, the teenager who works loose their motivation to studyand would like...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... society at all. The young people could loose the sense of education and morover will...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...governments may involve the students in part time jobs in summer period when it does not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, may, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for instance, in spite of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11355311355 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72870417173 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630036630037 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9628030783 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.333333333 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104183999987 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327996399661 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237166352989 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594660916458 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126740048974 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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