In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this
Many people think that young people should find a job or travel to other places to gain experiences, which is very useful for their future. However, beside advantages, this decision also bring disadvantages for young people.
Beginning with the positive points, young people who have spent some time on earning money or travelling to some places will have a overall view. They have learnt something teachers cannot teach them in the school, thus they have the ability to deal with complicated problems and to consider carefully before making a decision. They have learned how to keep calm in some bad situations and become more harmonious with the relationships. In addition, when they experience many both pleasant and difficult situations, they tend to be more confident, which is an important factor in academic study and work. Therefore, they can obtain many achievements in the future.
On the other hand, young people who are cheated easily because they are interested in many things and want to be known. They might believe strangers, hence they are exploited to work. Moreover, one of them cannot distinguish clearly between bad and good things. As a result, they are influenced and have negative behaviour, which maybe the cause of social evils. Furthermore, instead of working, they can learn another language to improve themselves.
In conclusion, there are many benefits in that encourage young people to work or travel. However, they should consider drawbacks to have an appropriate decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 242.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28099173554 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69545996176 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603305785124 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2129146992 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212883959091 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821260860339 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980759269398 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16328176568 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084177275961 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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