In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In some traditions, parents usually stimulate their offspring to put in a great deal of effort in order to accomplish their desirable goal. Though we can reap plenty of benefits from this way of educating children, there are still some specific drawbacks that should be taken into consideration.
On the one hand, we may mention undeniable fact that this valueable advice has been a strong motivation for adolescents to get a high result in whatever they do. At high school, being aware of trying hard in learning will help students get high score and perfect academic performance. Thanks to these encouragement, students can avoid procrastinating their homework or exercises which are important factors to enhance their knowledge as well as practical experience. Moreover, when students graduate from school and begin to join in labour market, keep working hard and persuing the targets will greatly boost their effiency and productivity.
On the other hand, besides the benefits above, there are still some drawbacks that cannot be neglected. When all the efforts of children are doomed to failure, they will easily become desparate about their future and cannot think precisely of how to confront the problems. This may be considered as dangerous situation as youngster who are not matured enough can have wrong behaviors and do something harmful to themselves even commiting suicide. For examples, in many Asian coutries, children are being put under pressure of parents’ expectation of attending university, thereby leading to the fact that they are almost looked like being lost everthing if they fail.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, we can see that merits coexist with demerits of telling children to try hard to achieve what they want in life, although I firmly belive that it is still a positive trend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this encouragement' or 'these encouragements'?
Suggestion: this encouragement; these encouragements
...perfect academic performance. Thanks to these encouragement, students can avoid procrastinating the...
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Line 4, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...see that merits coexist with demerits of telling children to try hard to achieve ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21621621622 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74809848596 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638513513514 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.0616929718 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.363636364 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232776032972 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792180022027 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604585715836 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144873339534 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577624518473 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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