Some educationalist argue that non-exam,art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft should be compulsory in the secondary school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For the betterment of students' academic performance, some academicians felt non-exam, entertaining sections be made compulsory for every high school students. Personally, I do not believe adding music, drama, art and craft into school curriculum will improve their academic performance, but will rather distract them.
It is often argued that Arts and creating arts be included in school curriculum and made compulsory for students. Proponents of this believes it will improve their academic performance. This, they claim will widen their knowledge, the students will have a clue about every aspect of education including art and culture. For example, during end of the year party in different schools, it has been observed that students who partake in virtually every activities of the event lead his or her class excellently. Also, it is believed that these students go out for competition making the school proud. These has made many parents enroll their wards in such schools.
On the other hand, there are strong reasons for arguing that these should not be included in the school curriculum compulsorily. Firstly, distractions set in. Entertainment is a very interesting segment, so these students focus much on it leaving their academic pursuit to suffer. For example, most of the celebrities in the the industry today are school dropouts. Also, the students are exposed to indecent dressings and the use of hard drugs in other to be recognized. At the end, their main purpose of studying suffers.
In conclusion, I believe that students will only perform woefully and end up going astray if music, drama or art and craft are made compulsory for all secondary school students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29259259259 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80556227844 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5755294965 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309919579769 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102180983691 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860122014905 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20660073383 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072666815606 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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