Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create while others struggle to survive Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some modern artists earn a lot of money rely on their own creations.In my opinion, it is not an unfair situation for others; therefore, I don’t agree with Governments’ taking steps.

First, they are completely worth to receive the amount of money as much as what they did. It is known that making an artwork is not an easy work. They may have to spend most of their time in their daily life instead of just 8 hours per day compared to other officers. Moreover, it also involves these artists’ grey matter, which can not be valued. I suppose that the high price of their products is absolutely reasonable because of those above features.

Second, if the governments take actions, the quality of these creative products can be reduced significantly. Today, artist is also a job. Their income decreasing leads to they need to make more products than before to earn their living. However, the faster they do, the less unique artworks are. At this time, artworks can lose their liberal sense and it will be replaced by a pensive mood. These changes of artists’ idea may then stimulate the culture of art to change in a different way.

In my view, Governments should let everything go by the way it should be. The reasons are that not only artists deserve enormous sums of money for their creation but also the quality of these works of art can be changed in the worse way.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, i suppose, by the way, in my opinion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1152.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70204081633 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51696782467 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1411830017 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2857142857 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200534674071 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640361975924 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602698263034 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133893632911 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054052369456 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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