Some parents prefer to have their children be raised by their grandparents. Some prefer to raise them on their own. Which would you prefer and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.
There is no doubt that children often develop as better humans under the love and supervision of the whole family. While, few parents choose to groom their children under their influence, others argue that grandparents should also be involved in raising them. I do not completely agree with these views and would support my explanation with relevant examples.
On the one hand, children who are brought-up by their parents tend to accomplish much in life. This is because, parents are from modern era which help them understand the needs and priorities of their young ones. For example, a study by the UK news channel reported that, the group of children under supervision of parents turned out to be more focussed and obedient. As a result, they excelled in different dimensions of life. In contrast, children also need a stress free, joyful environment for their natural growth and development.
On the other hand, those who recieve love and affection of grandparents are the most lucky ones. The reason is that, these aged people have seen many ups and downs in life, which make them value and pamper their grand children. For instance, I was fortunate to have my grandparent’s love and attention, which made me realise the importance of family. As a consequence, this helped many individuals to strike a balance between work and spending quality time with loved ones. However, children also need parent’s strict monitoring, which inturn lead them to a path of success. Therefore, whether a chid is under supervision of parents or grandparents, various environmental factors also play a crucial role in their neuro-cognitive development.
In conclusion, while children grow as more confident and focussed individuals under guidance of parents, I believe they also need the right amount of love and care from grandparents that would develop them into a balanced human being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 27, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89944246851 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581699346405 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8377822916 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223177802927 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761917907532 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663263654619 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138665269746 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566776766532 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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