some people argue that countries should have a moral obligation to help each other on the other hand some people argue that a large amount of aid money does not reach the poor of the world Discuss both view and give your opinion

Essay topics:

: some people argue that countries should have a moral obligation to help each other, on the other hand, some people argue that a large amount of aid money does not reach the poor of the world. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Whether it is the duty of government to support other countries or not has sparked a heated debate in our modern society. while some people claim that financial allowance of government might not be distributed to lower-class people, I am of a opinion that the financial support is important for other state’s progress.

On the one hand, it is argued that a majority of impoverished people could not be received the aid money. The first reason is that a large number of developing countries set a cumbersome procedures which constrained the money allocation speed to poverty areas. In some circumstance as inflation or imbalance of payments, this may reduce the quality of money during this process. Moreover, due to the limit of financial spending, many people still suffered from poverty. In fact, in the support project of Japan to Vietnam, a large amount of money was invested to improve urban infrastructure. It means that rural workers could not take the advantages of these money.

On the other hand, I advocate the idea of moral obligation in many countries. With the aid of developed countries’s funding, the third world countries could improve their economic position. For example, the developement of Vietnam’s infrastructure raised the transactional speed which resulted in the economic growth in national scale. On top of that, this moral duty leads to the domino effects which means the cooperation and interconnection between many countries across the world in the purpose of helping all poor people. this positive trend of caring and helping each other enhance the living of majority of impoverished people.

In conclusion, although there are a number of reasons for hostile attitude towards the fact that financial support cannot reach to poor people, I am convinced that it is necessary to carry out the moral obligation to help each other.

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Average: 7.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: While
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...the aid money. The first reason is that a large number of developing countries set a cumbersome p...
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...orkers could not take the advantages of these money. On the other hand, I advocate the i...
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...the purpose of helping all poor people. this positive trend of caring and helping ea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, moreover, so, still, third, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21782178218 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00004175306 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541254125413 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8689348435 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.928571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313190226631 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951889508145 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550171251333 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168039776734 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210904475128 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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