Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is impor

Essay topics:

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

It is argued that give permission for people under 15-18 years old made a decision in esential part of their life by themself raised a selfish person in the society although it is make them confident to take any needed action when they fully take apart in the society. I believed full approval by parents for children made them become a risk taker for action they took.

Environment has a huge impact to form children characteristic which will lead them in how they respond in the society. Parents who always approved any request of their child caused them selfish person and make them didn't take into consideration opinion of their surrounding people. For instance, youngsters are easily charmed by the new clothes wore by celebrities which seem to be improper and expensive, but they still overspend for them.

On the other hand, youngsters who never directly rejected by their parents for option they took provide them some benefit. Firstly, it is lead them become confident for making a decision when they enter a working life because they get used to be accepted and supported for every action taken by them. Secondly, Adolescent brave to take a risk for whar they decided even if it is critized by others because they has made a mapping in positive an negative effect for their decisions.

In conclusion, I agreed that childred never rejected by parents for their request has made them raised them into a creative person to be approved by their society

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...aused them selfish person and make them didnt take into consideration opinion of thei...
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Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
...y enter a working life because they get used to be accepted and supported for every action...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...f it is critized by others because they has made a mapping in positive an negative ...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...use they has made a mapping in positive an negative effect for their decisions. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.872 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5030029964 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1489804336 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7777777778 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120014260934 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631259270238 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363101897245 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878815206283 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110745712711 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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