Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible argument on both sides, and say which side you personally support.
Opinions are divergent as regards how children should use their freetime. A line of reasoning asserts that their whole free time reserve should be allocated to family quality time, whereas others believe such excessive family time to be redundant. This essay will discuss rationales of both camps in the forthcoming paragraphs before stating my opinion in favor of the latter.
On the one hand, parental positive influences are what proponents of the first view cite for their approval. By staying with their parents, children are sure to be protected from unfortunate perils, such as abductions, truancy or delinquency. Parents are there to prevent such incidents, or were they to occur, prompt actions are always taken to protect the child. Thus their safety is ensured. In addition, parents lend themselves to being good role models for children to learn from. This helps them learn how to behave properly, code of conduct and prevent them from bad influences of other nefarious friends or other people.
However, detrimental effects from this action is what the second groups uphold for the disapproval. Due to an over-excessive time attaching to their parents, grounds for children’s independence are rare. This greatly dampens their ability to do things independently, such as taking care of their own selves or learning to cope with changes. It also hinders their social skills, such as making friends or establishing connections, because interaction with strangers is limited. The matter is further exacerbated when the parents and family themselves, are imperfect models which could instill improper values into the children, rendering them perpetually immature as an individual.
In short, while allocating all free time with family would have some benefits of shielding children from outside hazards, it deprives them of the ability to grow up as an independent and mature individual. Thus, I side myself with the second argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, second, so, still, thus, whereas, while, as regards, in addition, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36928104575 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78591848259 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630718954248 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3982050689 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6875 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297766883479 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891321790684 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562586121738 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180393871583 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561271106926 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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