Some people believe that country development reaps benefits from the high-educated university students. However, some people think that the large amount of young people in university only leads to high unemployment graduates. Discuss both views and give opinion.
It is commonly believed that the spread increasingly of tertiary school may bring positive impacts on country’s prosperity of economic and society as well. However some opponents argue that the excessive number of graduates result in high rate of joblessness in the near future.
I am of opinion that benefits of high trained students are more significance.
On the one hand, advantages of studying university deserve to receive acceptance of community for some following reasons. From economic perspective, labor work with a high qualification make particularly contribution on increasing productivity and efficiency in working. There is the fact in recent years that knowledge based economy is dominant in currently competitive market. For instance, the employees in these days perform their tasks with scientific accountant instead of manual work in the past. From society perspective, citizens in a country may gain more safety and peace when youngsters are taught how to be law-abiding citizens though campus environment. There is no denying that high educated students often avoid to illegal activities that makes residents be more well-being.
One the other hand, the expansion of university as nowadays that can cause some negative effects on society in the years ahead. The first point in against popularity of tertiary school is that a massive amount of students graduating this means that competition in working position becomes more severe than the precious. As a consequence, graduates after finishing curriculum do have a job that enables society bearing a burden and leading stagnation in economic development. The another problem taking advantages of desiring in pursuing higher education, some private organizations open a lot of universities due to profit purpose. This quality of educational system do not guarantee in training and educating students. Some students have to suffer loans to spend a large of money on this school. Because of insufficient knowledge, youngsters is unemployment in long time, even doing part-time job to earning a living.
In conclusion, it seems to me that students training from tertiary school have merits in developing their country and make security in their community. However, excessive spreading in university has made a number of youngsters being joblessness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5393258427 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08719494521 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589887640449 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1827053206 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.555555556 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198477787382 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573411695341 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332941339971 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104691597036 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139749683475 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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