It is true that the security of society in some parts of the world is alarming. This puts the governments' officials under the pressure to looking for the main causes and bringing up feasible to prevent the problem from further exacerbated. Some people are of the belief that it is the act of the police who always take their guns with them drives people to be more violent. While it appears to be quite justifiable, i personally opine that there are more important reasons for this heated issue.
One reason to support my view is that those guns from the police act as a deterant against people having eletated and illegal behaviors. It is undeniable that people tend to fix their behaviors nicely when seeing a police guy heading towards them with a gun. It seems to be our own natural instinct. In addition, there are 2 major factors in terms of reasons which make the level of violence be on the rise. The first and foremost reason is subjective to parents' neglect or inappropriate child- raising ways. Most of parents nowadays virtually devote their whole of time to work in order to ensure material well- being, which means that they may spend less time to take care of their children. Without their supervision, children can may friends with malevolent friends outside and then become depressed and anti- social youngsters. Therefore, parents should equip themselves with specific knowledge and skills to provide proper and adequate childcare which are deemed to be the key of youth violence increase. Moreover, the growing rate of the unemployment causes higher property and violent crime rates. They yields that unemployment triggers participation in insurgencies, prompts people to joint violent gangs, drive people to extremism and that is the primary cause behind domestic violence.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned discussions, one may conclude that the practice of police bringing their guns with them is not the main culprit of violent growth. The accelerating rate of violence should be ascribed to the combination of parental care and the rising popularity of unemployment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 509, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the parents') or simply say ''Most parents''.
Suggestion: Most of the parents; Most parents
...t or inappropriate child- raising ways. Most of parents nowadays virtually devote their whole o...
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Line 2, column 1111, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'yield'
Suggestion: yield
... property and violent crime rates. They yields that unemployment triggers participatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07803468208 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72192505528 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57225433526 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6172606795 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8125 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140022593686 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436102332185 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317718358695 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966841816145 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328957230619 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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