some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation
Opinions are divided on whether people should accept their current situation regardless of how unsatisfactory it is or they should be encouraged to reverse such situation. While I understand why some people support the former view, I am still in favor of the latter one.
It is understandable why some people believe that it is better to satisfy with the given opportunity than to attempt to improve it. From their point of view, despite their expenditure of time and effort on work, they may fail to improve it. To put it in a simpler way, that the feeling of being fail deters those from taking risk and prefer a risk-free job. By way of illustration, there are people who are willing to scarify time or even some relationships in order to gain promotion at work, whereas some may suspect whether their scarification will be compensated by a worth reward. As a result of being doubting about ones’ ability, they refuse to fix the issue.
Nevertheless, I still side with those who believe that trying to reverse such status is necessary. This is due to the fact that people should make use of the given chance rather than to blame it for their current situation. In other words, people are the owner of their life, thus they would not be easily downed by it. Therefore, rather than giving up the unpleasant situation, attempting to move forward is a more preferable choice. Another point to be mentioned is that every investment would result in a pay-off, though it might not meet one’s expectation, it still be a valuable lesson. This means that putting a lot of effort may not guarantee the improvement in their lives, however, they still be able to have first-hand experience and learn from failures.
In conclusion, despite acknowledging why people consider accepting bad situation a better choice, I hold the belief that trying to improve it is needed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 601, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sated by a worth reward. As a result of being doubting about ones’ ability, they refuse to fix...
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Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ht not meet one’s expectation, it still be a valuable lesson. This means that putt...
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Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
..., they still be able to have first-hand experience and learn from failures. In conclusion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, whereas, while, even so, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8375 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7526975406 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3812773235 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.571428571 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57142857143 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211923206731 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736577060161 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787993454048 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159306863929 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720569899447 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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