Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Life hardships are inevitable in our daily life. Whilst some people hold the argument that being consent with those disappointing situations is the most optimal way, the others want to take their best attempts to improve the circumstances. Personally, I prefer the latter although each belief has its own merits.
On the one hand, tolerating unwilling conditions can bring numerous benefits. Firstly, people’s desires are innumerable, especially when dealing with money. If they can make more money, they would prefer to afford a more wealthy life, which leads to purchasing higher – quality as well as more expensive goods and services. Therefore, accepting situations can play a vital role in setting boundaries for human behaviours. Besides, tolerating disappointing circumstances can help diminish frustration caused by overthinking.
On the other hand, many strong-willed people would like to make every effort to enhance difficulties. When people can overcome problematic circumstances, they can find more comfortable situations. For example, an employee does not satisfy with the amount of compensation, he can discuss the concern with the managers. If the problem is solved, his salary can be raised. Otherwise, there are many different attractive opportunities in other businesses. Furthermore, challenge takers who take initiative to improve hardships can become a motivator for many people. For instance, Barack Obama was the first colored citizen to be elected to the US presidency, which motivates the colored to achieve their goals.
In conclusion, even though accepting disappointing situations can help set the limitations and reduce frustration, making efforts to improve such circumstances can make people more successful and motivating. Being a determined person, I would not stay idle and take the best attempts to make a condition better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68327402135 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15960128099 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644128113879 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.698083383 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9411764706 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5294117647 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121821117586 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363782622514 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326338203077 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0798449480888 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266525726873 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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