Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.
People have different views about facing undesirable situations, such as lack of money or when people do not derive satisfaction from their jobs. While it is believed by some that these situations is better to be accepted, others feel that ameliorating them is worth to try. In my opinion, people should try to improve their quality of life.
On the one hand, those who support the idea that accepting bad occasions is the most effective method to cope with the issue highlight the fact that people have to face such uncontrollable difficulties as losing family members. If they continue to be depressed instead of accepting it, they will not be able to lead to socially and mentally health lifestyle, and thus it is important to accept it. In addition, it is said that it is advisable to confirm any kind of job, even though people do not feel satisfied doing them. In fact, they should be happy that they have a job while many people struggle to be unemployed. Finally, proponents of accepting money deficiency claim that the economy is unpredictable, so it is challenging to make the amount of money that we desire.
On the other hand, there are many people who believe that bad situations in most cases can be alleviated. It is emphasized that getting satisfaction from a job is an essential factor that should be considered carefully, as large proportion of one’s life is likely to be spent on doing a job, and therefore if people cannot feel satisfied with their jobs, it is important to attempt to change their careers. It is also practical which can be seen that some programmers, who used to be unsatisfied with their old jobs, have managed to get the job that they enjoy doing. Furthermore, shortage of money can be tackled in many ways, ranging from running a business to obtain a part time job or relocation. For example, certain amount of residents of many developing countries tend to work in developed countries earning a good salary.
In conclusion, although there are some situations that we do not have control over them and it is advisable to accept them, I believe that it is worthwhile to attempt to improve bad situations in many cases, because we have plenty of options to choose from and the world is full of opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, in many cases, in most cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79283887468 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78304588863 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50895140665 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8669165894 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5714285714 7.06120827912 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215584751061 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803477639048 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464025902729 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144798943481 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760808537808 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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