some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
A majority of people claim that sharing information of scientific research, business and the academic world is worthwhile. While some opine that such information is invaluable to be shared freely. In my opinion, each view has its own merits, which should not be mutually exclusive.
On the one hand, the benefits of publicising information in those fields are proved. Firstly, for no reason do citizens not have the right to know information relating to science, business as well as academy, which are basic and vital fields in life. By doing this, not only the specific knowledge but also the common sense are raised considerably, making ways for an intellectual and fruitful population. Secondly, because of being informed that information, the standard of living may be improved on a daily basis. Specifically, people can take advantage of statistics on stock or real estate, prestigious colleges and current educational approaches or even the application of science in daily life.
On the other hand, advocates of the impossibility of sharing information in backbone fields claim that those kinds of information are highly secured, by their nature, therefore, were they to be informed widely, the threat posed by certain types of criminals namely hackers, counterfeits and so on is inevitable, leading to the negative impacts on society. Besides, owing to the significance, some information is costly during the analysis, thus, freely publicising would harm the budget.
In conclusion, after both views being examined, I am of the opinion that the selection of which information involving in business, science and academy to publicise should be conducted rigorously.
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Comments
Facing to the ease of
Facing to the ease of available information in our globalized world some people have argued if it s a benefit or a downside to share all of them.
Allow to everyone to share information and get free access to them can represent a truly educative purpose. As a result more people will be able to get a better knowledge and to enlarge their culture.
Moreover that could arise a stronger liaison among people who share same interests or hobbies in specific fields easing their communication and improving their potential knowledge. For example, nowadays Internet caused a major diffusion of information among people all over the world who can share each other valuable notions and data.
Nevertheless in my opinion the disadvantages overshadow the benefits. In fact more shared and free information can lessen the control over them, because it becomes more difficult to check them. Thence it is enough easy running into fake or bad data that can mislead you in the research.
On the contrary this problem would not arise if the access to them was restricted. In addition free access for everyone to certain information could be used by criminals or terrorists in order to achieved their wretched goals in a more destructive way. For instance i believe that most of the suicide car bombers who struck western countries, over the last few years, could have emulated the first ones who committed the terrible deeds. As mass-media spread these facts all over the world. Consequently it could have had a domino effect on other easily influenced people who realized how could be effective to kill persons using a simple car or truck.
In conclusion i argue that some information should be forbidden to the mass by the governments owing to their national security.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s and the academic world is worthwhile. While some opine that such information is inv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39393939394 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02673084907 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632575757576 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.2686993266 49.4020404114 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.454545455 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.1818181818 7.06120827912 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287012216761 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103446620643 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103322128798 0.0667982634062 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180921579565 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101273724049 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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