Some people believe that playing a musical instruments can be beneficial in many different ways Others think it is a waste of time to play a musical instrument Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that playing a musical instruments can be beneficial in many different ways. Others think it is a waste of time to play a musical instrument. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Submitted by Neha mehta on Mon, 11/06/2017 - 06:10

We give for teaching other subjects will help to produce better and more successful Music is a vital part of all human cultures and a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world. Presently, some masses claim that amount of time spent on learning musical instruments is lucrative in many terms. However, critics argue that learning music is non-beneficial for learners. Here, I would like to discuss both views with my own perception.

To begin with, music classes help pupils to bring out their hidden talent in front of the whole world. To elaborate, learning music not only offers chance to identify their musical skills but also fulfill their dreams that are related to tones. Hence, musical apparatus plays a paramount role to explore unrecognized talent among people. Furthermore, it will give them chance to be creative. Therefore, the existence of musical classes can be used to facilitate and develop children who have a passion for music.

On the flip side, music lessons hinder in academic performance of a child. To illustrate, such classes would distract a student from their homework that could have been better utilized for mainstream subjects. Thence, distraction as well as lack of concentration make these classes useless. What is more, wastage of lots of money on musical instruments provides reason to eliminate such courses from school curriculum.

From my notion, both aspects have their own significance. Music lessons work as a stress buster whereas, spending a lots of time on learning music digress student from their homework that is totally unjustifiable.
To recapitulate, I believe giving the time and money for teaching music in schools as much as society.

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Average: 7.5 (4 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, as well as, to begin with, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19494584838 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72757479695 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602888086643 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7242772462 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9375 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3125 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308598936518 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960443034337 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571861377718 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1659615674 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753260901852 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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