Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the challenge of selecting an effective curriculum has been a controversial issue with both educationists and students. Therefore, the syllabus at the school aims to meet the job- oriented purpose of the students. I totally agree with the idea that the syllabus for all students at the school should contain the wide range of subjects including academic subjects and others optional ones.
To begin with, the multidiscipline studies has been designed by pedagogical experts to allow students develop their practical and professional skills such as creative thinking and logical thinking. This means that, all subjects virtually play their own role to enhance the potential ability for progression and improve students' academic achievement. Furthermore, adding these subjects like arts, music in a timetable of a school is to supplement for brain working effectively. It is undoubted that reinforcing the bonding between different brain structures associated with scientific and artistic creativities, promotes the development of human civilization. In addition, the core curriculum with varied subjects provides the students the coverage of necessary general knowledge, irrespective of their fields of interest.
It appears that these additional subjects like music and art considered beneficial for those students who are under pressure in compulsory academic ones due to lack of interest in these studies. The students can enhance the relevant skills as part of their leisure activities or hobbies. It is useful time to relax and mentally unwind after a day of non-stop studying. Besides, they are able to enter a wider community where teachers and peers will motivate them to improve the academic performance and attain their achievement.
To conclude, it is essential for experiencing and absorbing a broad and balanced curriculum, there are definite advantages when students expect to develop holistically. This can help them understand their potential, find identity and purpose of life, deepen their understanding and capabilities nature for their future careers.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6858974359 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05923736699 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605769230769 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5800771024 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.714285714 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16955594503 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544320967966 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532726134319 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993012182838 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299263640164 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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