Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, social activities are becoming more popular in the educational system, so it is believed that unsalaried work for the public should be obligatory for high school students. From a personal perspective, I partly agree with the above-mentioned notion because it develops social skills within the younger generation, but the dangers of doing outdoor activities should be considered.
To begin with, working without payment to help other people entails few potential risks to pupils. To be more specific, when unpaid social activities are unsupervised, these jobs could pose a threat of strangers and accidents to students. In fact, nations in Europe always organise unpaid extra curriculum with monitors who are skilled teachers to avoid unexpected problems, which used to happen in the past when they set up those activities without supervisors. In reality, a recent study showed that youngsters in Zambia relished doing these volunteer activities with monitors, leading to a lower number of delinquents in this country when students were guided by skillful teachers . Therefore, it is necessary to create unpaid community work with strict management to ensure the safety for students.
On the other hand, unpaid community service plays a key role in the foster of communication skillset. This is because doing these activities require the contribution of a large number of people, there are more opportunities for students to work with their peers in order to make new friends, resulting in the expansion of their network. In addition, when students join voluntary community service without being paid, the meaning of working for the public and empathy is grown within these youngsters. For example, a recent study in Lithuania illustrated that pupils who enjoy working in their local community such as doing charity or taking care of elderly had greater social skills than those who refused to attend these jobs, especially interactive and problem-solving abilities. As a result, students are likely to significantly improve their social skills when joining public works without being paid.
In conclusion, it is argued that volunteer jobs without payment should be required in high school programs, and I believe that those works contribute noticeably to the development in communication abilities of students. Although there are few dangerous problems related to these unsalaried social services, they could be eliminated by the strict control of students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48825065274 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89148354367 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535248041775 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7405755564 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.142857143 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3571428571 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174464984357 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680959469106 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454008091273 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120874295367 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422092277615 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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