Some people claim that using tobacco has brought several social problems and smoking should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people claim that using tobacco has brought several social problems and smoking should be banned.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People who argue that smoking should not be prohibited they claim that government generates revenue through this medium.The money incurred from tax payment are used to build hospital ,school and construct good roads.

Advocates of this group also claim that restaurants and bars depended on tobacco sales as their only source of income and thus if a ban is implemented on such products,the rate of unemployment and robbery would be on the increase.

However,there are convincing reasons why I do think that the use of tobacco should not be allowed. Firstly ,smoking is harmful. The use of tobacco contains toxic substance such as nicotine which when inhaled has an adverse effect on the health on an individual thus predisposing such persons to conditions like lungcancer and heart problem. For instance, a research survey conducted in Nigeria on the factors involved in the cause of disease indicates that about 70% of illness are caused by exposure to inhalation and exhalation of tobacco products. Secondly,the youths engage most of their time in areas like bars and clubs ,where such products are used , thus depriving them to contribute positively to the society. Therefore, government should ban the sales of alcohol in public places, and also increase tax rate on shops or hotels that sell such products.

In conclusion, it is my convinced view that the smoking and usage of tobacco should be forbidden because it is dangerous to the health. It also prevents individuals to engage actively to the growth of the community . Therefore, I would suggest that the government should promote awareness of the effects of the use of such productsm

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Average: 6.8 (5 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.156133829 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80611718406 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591078066914 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1071501234 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.090909091 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.01903807615 478% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198057802026 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771916225218 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058265753174 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121879326877 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296581699987 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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