Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
It is argued that the payments to performers like movie celebrities, pop artists or famous athletes are too high. The essay will outline the reasons why I do not agree the argument and the positions in other fields that are worth to have high salary too.
To begin with, I believe that the celebrities in the entertainment fields are not given too much payment. One of the main arguments is that they are worth to receive such money as they are skillful enough to entertain their audiences and earn extra revenue for their employers. For example, by attracting their fans to purchase the tickets to see their outstanding performance, the entertainers can make the high payment a worthy investment for their bosses. In addition, higher payment will provide incentive to other performers to enhance their profession, making our society more fascinating with more skillful artists.
Besides in entertainment domain, the people who work in science domain should also earn the higher salary. The reason is that the development of technology can help a country to accelerate its growth of national economy whilst scientists are the most important human assets in technology companies. For instance, to attract the smartest people to work for them, the giant technology companies such as “Google” or “Apple”, usually offer much higher salary package to candidate who are from all over the world, contributing United States the most powerful economic entity on Earth.
In conclusion, in my opinion, I don’t think the performers in entertainment field are paid too much money due to their professional performance which brings joy to their followers and benefits their hirers. Additionally, the individuals in technology domain should also be provided higher payment because it has the positive effect on national economic growth.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36301369863 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02105267115 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.7727080612 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.363636364 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5454545455 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17065698941 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671797163325 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413179925721 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109141071694 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396653448996 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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