Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos.
Other people say that there are benefits for the animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of
this debate, and give your personal view.
You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own
knowledge and experience.
People have different views about keeping animals behind bars. While some think that captivation has an adverse effect on animals and can cause mental disorder, I side with those who believe that zoos may serve as a habitat for endangered species and could have positive impact on life of individuals and livestock.
On the one hand, we cannot deny the fact that zoos influence detrimentally on livestock`s over all being. The most appealing concern when it comes to animal captivation is psychological illness which can be caused by various factors when animals behind cages. Keeping animals in cages isolate and restrict animals` movement, also they are forced to eat limited amount of food, due to the fact that they do not get what they want, they begin to behave inappropriately. For example, in the journal «New scientist» it was reported about the fox that behaved abnormally in the zoo and was spinning in one direction all day. Moreover, zoos are artificial environments which were constructed by authorities in order to gain profit as a form of money .Therefore, most zoos do not monitor the health of animals, they just keep them in order to cheer the public and make profit. As a result, captive animals became weak and lose hunting ability and can not survive in the wild. For instance, scientists show that, those animals that were kept in captivity, when were released into the wild could not adapt to the wildlife.
On the flip side, zoos play crucial role both for people and animals. Mainly, man-made parks highly important for wildlife conservation, also zoos help to protect endangered species. In other words, those animals that suffer from poaching can be protected and provided with a habitat, which can be suitable for breeding and living. As an example, rare species of pandas or rhinos are kept in zoos in order to preserve them. Besides, zoos are interesting and educational area. They can be used by teachers as a natural learning environment where children may explore various species of animals more rootedly. There are numerous types of animas like foxes, giant pandas, otters which can be studied in visual way.
In conclusion, I am in favor of the idea that we should keep animals in zoos because it brings many benefits, however the fact about negative effect of zoos on animals can not be denied.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96183206107 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65278860623 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577608142494 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0411507603 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.875 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25916317625 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865826638445 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690601723419 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169788594883 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335630969218 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.