Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There have been some controversy over whether sport centers should be increased in other to boost the health status of the public or whether some other methods should be tried. In my opinion, health education can be utilized.

It is often argued by some individuals that in order to have quality health, athletic centers should be increased. This, they believe will help people to keep fit without being denied of class because of space or proximity. It is believed that if there is at least 5 centers in a community, residents would have access to whichever is close and have quality training. Also availability of more sporting centers draw people's attention especially those that need to talk or relate with people. For instance, a young widower often visit a tennis center in his vicinity in order to mix with people and prevent depression. Hence, this improve the mental health of people.

Others might disagree and claim increase in sport facilities will only have little or no effect on people's health status. They claim that there are other methods to look into that can be of help such as health education on dietary intake and lifestyle. Proponents of this claim diet is a key to improving the well-being of people, this is because diet relates to many disease conditions like obesity, diabetes, heart conditions and lots more. For instance, the parents of a 5year old child weighing 40kg were happy because their son was chubby until he was diagnosed with a heart disease. If only they have have been informed of the complications of excess fat, they would have monitored his diet and possible sedentary lifestyle.

In conclusion, it is my view that medical advice will be best in improving the well-being of the public. This should include dietary, lifestyle, and extent of exercise.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, so, well, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97689768977 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55043987258 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561056105611 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7472011593 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.533333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24714228962 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894766592596 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642510352428 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154183933958 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345301677818 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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