Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Essay topics:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

The question of whether to expand the quantities of equipment for sports or apply other remedies is very topical today, as so many people are struggling with health problems. There are valid arguments on both sides, which I will elucidate now.

On the other hand, those who support to intensify sports facilities promote the idea that these will induce locals to take regular exercises, thus leading to amelioration of public health. They point the evidence from scientific research that sports would boost the immune system, burn fat and reduce the risk of experiencing major illness. Furthermore, proponents of improving public health associated with physical activities claim that it might provide opportunities for social interaction as well as the elimination of mental disorder. For example, gym members might convey others in clubs and improve social life. To the supporter of the idea, these benefits are convincing.

However, opponents of sports equipment for the public believe that its effectiveness is limited. To be more precise, people have inclined the hectic pace of city life and be pressured for livelihood, resulting in no longer time for physical activities. Moreover, the main remedy would gain awareness the benefit of sports and encourage to release the sedentary lifestyle through public speaking or media. For the corporation, employers should allow more flexible working hours, so that staff can take time off for taking exercise. Another solution maybe could impose a high tax on high-fat products, tobacco, and alcohol, as excessive consumption of these contributes to poor health.

Overall, I would tend to side with the opponents of focussing on sports facilities which it seems to be a narrow approach. People should be encouraged not only to more physically active but also to adopt a healthier lifestyle in general

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether to expand the quantities of equipment f...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'releasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: releasing
...ess the benefit of sports and encourage to release the sedentary lifestyle through public ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, in general, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3801369863 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77672576042 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63698630137 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1632517237 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.214285714 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195646987811 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637110711313 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519564261243 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10940649564 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402317824574 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.