some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views on how to raise public health effectively. While i concede that improvement in the quantity of sport facilities has not brought benefits to everyone yet, i am strongly of the opinion that it is the best way to enhance our community's health.
On the other hand, it is likely not everyone is keen on sports. With the development of technology, communication and integration, people tend to be up their neck in their works, study and internet. Consequently, their fund of time for sports may reduces considerably when they choose to relax when they have free time, or to work out at home to keep them healthy as long as they do not have to go out of their home. As a result, to increase the number of sport equipment seems unlikely to have any impacts on them.
However, i would argue that the more quantity of sport equipment is, the more appealing encouragement is. Doing exercises or playing sport certainly enhance our health, and sport facilities are indispensable tools. In addition, with more equipment available, the players do not have to wait as a waste of time. People have equal participation will be the most significant motivation for everyone to enjoy. In this way, to improve sport facilities in terms of quantity can play an important role in encouraging our community to take part in doing more exercises and activities.
In conclusion, although the fact that raising the number of sport facilities does not have much and immediate effect, i am firmly convinced that it is the best choice to improve public health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86891385768 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83816063224 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558052434457 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1970422989 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246643935403 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094763561244 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726138033033 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170890399444 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696044199527 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.