Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, it is not uncommon to see that an increasing number of people suffer from more or less physical issues like obesity. In order to successfully address this problem, some people think that the most effective way is to build more sports facilities, while others dispute with this statement. From my point of view, increasing sports centers might contribute to public health, but this would not be as effective as other alternative measures.
There is no doubt that public health tends to be reinforced throughout the construction of more sports areas. To be specific, this measure would provide more space and facilities for citizens to work out, and thereby people are more likely to ameliorate their physical condition by exercising regularly. For example, statistics suggest that the proportion of healthy group rose by 10.5% in Chengdu after the construction of newly built sports center. In short, we cannot deny the efficiency of more sports facilities when it comes to the improvement of public health.
Nevertheless, building more sports space would not meet the exact expectation, as working out regularly largely depends on people's spontaneous willingness after all. What I'm trying to say is that citizens might be too lethargic to exercise, albeit to the increasing number of these sports facilities constructed by government. In other words, it appears to be more reasonable to raise people's awareness of taking care of their own health via education or public service advertising. Therefore, even merely jogging outside would be worthwhile for personal health.
For another angle, what if there is a reward for those actually with improved healthy condition? For instance, perhaps government or community could establish a fund to praise dwellers who work out and strengthen their body. Though this might be a whimsical idea, the truth is that people could be motivated by all sorts of rewards and crave to exercise and ingest healthy food spontaneously. To sum up, simply adding some incentives would give citizens more motivation to care about their health.
In conclusion, it is true more sports facilities would be useful to some extent, yet I think the most fundamental thing is to make people aware of the essence of their own personal physical condition by either public education or financial incentive. There is also an old saying in China 'Nothing could be successful if people lack motivation'.
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Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in short, no doubt, in other words, it is true, more or less, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24615384615 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80365592076 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3947157419 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.352941176 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1176470588 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297023451822 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101271224141 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068689159395 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178158174912 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756531150664 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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