Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
According to a survey, the average tuition fee for undergraduate study in UK is approximately 10,000 pounds annually, while that for postgraduate study is roughly 13,000 pounds per year. Therefore, nowadays, it is not uncommon to see a large number of students from less well-off families give up the offers of their dream schools. In order to address this problem, some people propose a policy that government pay for university students who cannot afford their tuition fees. From my point of view, I admit that such a policy might be somewhat effective to assist students from low income families, yet I cannot neglect the potential negative effects followed by this assistance.
There is no doubt that a free university education would be conducive to support students from insufficient families. For instance, a report in 2017 suggested that even a middle-class family had trouble paying for their son’s tuition of University of Pennsylvania without any loans and grants, and nearly three quarters of students complained about the high expenditures in universities. Thus, it seems to be reasonable for governments to pay for high education of these vulnerable groups so as to guarantee the equality of education opportunities. If governments offer these grants, the economic conditions of various families would not be the restrictions for entering students to pursue high education as long as they could get enrolled. However, such a policy is too ideal to take into practice, especially when it comes to a complete unbiased and impartial standard to identify the needy family. Besides, the free university education for the impoverished groups could lead to another kind of inequality which, in fact, sabotages the interests of well-off families since they still need to pay for themselves. Certainly, we cannot deny the effectiveness of the proposal; however, by no means can we ignore a couple of side effects it may cause.
On the other hand, this seemingly impeccable policy can backfire in spite of its eleemosynary intention. In fact, Germany had implemented a policy offering free university education for several years, while the government considered charging again in 2006. What could be the cause? The truth is that students might take the government’s assistance for granted, and thereby they are unlikely to cherish the opportunity of getting high education as well as try their best to perform well because of lack of motivation. However, governments could take alternative measures to provide financial aids rather than merely exempting tuition from less well-off students. Firstly of all, they could offer school loan with low interest so that students, knowing that they are actually supporting themselves, would treat their academic work more seriously; additionally, scholarships for top students would be effective too as student are more likely to pursue outstanding marks in order to get rewards. To sum up, absolute free university education without any restriction is an oversimplified method which is proved to be less effective, and alternatives that would incite students’ motivation are better choices.
In conclusion, it is not easy to determine whether government should provide free university education to students from low income families as it is actually conducive for students subject to drop out but does have its drawbacks such as the difficulty of setting up standard and the potential to lessen students’ motivation. As far as I’m concerned, I tend to favor other alternative solutions including school grants, fellowships and etc.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...re, nowadays, it is not uncommon to see a large number of students from less well-off families gi...
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Line 3, column 495, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...gh education of these vulnerable groups so as to guarantee the equality of education opp...
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Line 7, column 442, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ns including school grants, fellowships and etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, as well as, in spite of, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3049.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41563055062 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06369963251 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525754884547 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 952.2 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.5458475724 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.45 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.15 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 5.21951772744 216% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276150030841 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864707326916 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637147785044 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174516482916 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311343531663 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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