Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger. Other say that economic growth is causing damage to the environment, and should be stopped now. Discuss both views and give your opinion
This contemporary society has witnessed a significant growth in economy. In addition, while many people consider that this rapid development plays an important role in preventing poverty and starvation, the others believe economic enhancement is the main factor which invokes environmental problems. Although I cannot deny the fact that economy may bring about pollution , I still incline to the former view.
On the other hand, I understand the reason why many people of the fervent conviction argue that economic growth leads to the devastation in our ecology. To begin with, economization is directly proportional to air degradation. For instance, such a development in factories or industrial facilities can invoke higher rate of fossil fumes or gas, directly causing air pollution. Consequently, if this alarming problem still emerges on a large scale, residents will suffer from many health risks such as lung cancer or cardiovascular diseases. Secondly, deforestation may also come as an expense. Nowadays, trees are demolished massively to widen the space for the construction of factories. However, such a loss in plants’ number can directly bring about tremendous impacts related to flooding or erosion.
Despite the reasons described above, I still believe economic growth is extremely beneficial in term of ending impoverished issues and hunger. Firstly, the more the nation focuses on economic conditions, the more job opportunities people will obtain. For instance, HCM city has recently provided aldults with more occupations related to economization, reducing the rate of unemployement. Hence, such a positive development can help people not only ease heavy burden but also improve personal status. Secondly, economic growth means expanding national expenditure.Moreover, if this massive amount of budget is spent on purchasing modern devices, food will be produced effectively. Consequently, an abundance in foodstuff can gratify humans’ demand on a daily basis, avoiding starvation on a great scale.
Taking everything into consideration, although a concentration on economy may directly invoke environmental issues, my firm conviction is that pressing problems related to poverty and hunger are eradicated thanks to the enhancement of economy.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75892857143 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25759536325 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6867000926 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.823529412 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1176470588 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170850104949 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050124022136 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512143796767 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962622940324 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423304195009 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t that economy may bring about pollution , I still incline to the former view. On...
^^
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...c conditions, the more job opportunities people will obtain. For instance, HCM ci...
^^
Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...th means expanding national expenditure.Moreover, if this massive amount of budget is sp...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75892857143 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25759536325 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6867000926 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.823529412 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1176470588 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170850104949 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050124022136 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512143796767 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962622940324 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423304195009 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.