Some people say that experience a child has before starting school has the most influence on their future life Others say that experience as a teenager especially at school is more influential Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people say that experience a child has before starting school has the most influence on their future life. Others say that experience as a teenager, especially at school, is more influential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Submitted by Luu125 on Fri, 10/16/2020 - 11:36

While some people believe that what a child experiences prior to their school time is the most influential to the future life, others think that teenage experiences at school are more important. This essay will discuss both viewpoints.

On the one hand, what pre-schoolers go through plays a crucial role in their adult life. Firstly, such experiences can contribute to a child's creativity. In fact, it seems effortless for children to absorb new things in life due to their brain's flexible plasticity. In addition, their developing brain can allow them to read those things in different ways, which can shape their own world view that can make them more creative. Furthermore, negatives that children are subjected to seem to take a heavy toll on their future life. Children who are victimized by bullying or abuse are more prone to become withdrawn and sensitive to society in adulthood. Thus, childhood experiences can cause a significant influence on a person's future life.

On the other hand, teenage students' life experiences should not be regarded as trivial. Young people tend to change their behaviour and mindset as teenagers. When young people reach their puberty, they are likely to suffer social stress and aggression owing to their stress hormone system development. In the long run, such changes in their hormones may give rise to chronic mental problems later in life. Moreover, school time is instrumental in making a young person a well-rounded adult. Education at school can not only equip students with the fundamental knowledge needed for their prospective career, but also facilitate their social awareness, such as moral code. Therefore, puberty-driven changes in teenagers' personality and schooling can affect their life as an adult.

In conclusion, experiences as a pre-schooler can have an effect on their adult life. However, I believe that school time that teenagers have can equally influence adulthood. More importantly, both children and teenagers should be cared and educated appropriately.

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Average: 7.3 (16 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 719, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...es can cause a significant influence on a persons future life. On the other hand, teen...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ure life. On the other hand, teenage students life experiences should not be regarded...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3625 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87703732162 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3131867248 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3157894737 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8421052632 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355810665238 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111263476125 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983711470541 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262650403624 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133350380115 0.056905535591 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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