Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that authorities should pay more attention to the decrease in environmental pollution and housing problems in order to avoid illness and disease. From my perspective, I totally agree with this statement, described in the following essay before the conclusion is reached.
To begin with, there are numerous health problems that are caused by the environmental conditions. For example, annually, manufactories release a large number of hazardous gas emissions into the air, posing a serious threat to the entire world, which causes citizens to cope with a number of diseases. Thus, the government should make use of its power to require manufactories to install proper emission control systems. This would be a great contribution to the environment.
However, not only poor environmental conditions but also depends on various factors. For instance in my country, Vietnam, many people live in slums and do not have opportunities to access clear water because of a lack of a purified water factory. In these areas, people often suffer from diseases, such as dengue and malaria. So, the government also has to allocate its national budget to these places, such problems could be avoided. In addition, in order to have a better result, the authority should make education a top priority like running classes on how to prevent disease. This would enable raising people's awareness about avoiding illness.
In conclusion, the environment has always played a vital role in human health, so the government and each individual must do everything to protect as well as allocate funds to other things in order to prevent diseases effectively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...xample, annually, manufactories release a large number of hazardous gas emissions into the air, p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28787878788 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91251179861 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647727272727 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7854286515 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.384615385 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214013852164 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648847759124 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554411048786 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119932422967 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442322659367 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.